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http://thefool.bradan.net/Daniel%20M%20 ... ision1.mp3

hi
This is the newest of the stuff i have done. It needs some remixing and redoing stuff; critics are absolutely welcome as i am a begginer and would like to know what to make different

stuff i know:

-the vocals arent that good; i have a cold and the "nasal" sounds are a bit hard to pronounce; and my voice is a bit unrough atm..
-redo vocals; there is too much noice and a mic clicking on and off.
-redo the lead..
-THE ENDING IS HORRIBLE! i havent put a second work in it.
-shorter intro time?

however this is again just some testing i have done
thanks for listening..

Nice! I like it

thx

It's good but it's not music I would listen to.

Joakim Christiansen wrote:It's good but it's not music I would listen to.

Based on your pic you look like more into "rock"
but thanks!

I thought it was great, its Trance/Rave which I like very good

bit more vocals & shorten the intro and your there

Hi,

Well done. But there are some things I want to tell you as constructive critics (everything is only my opinion):

The song is missing some structure. Is there a refrain or something recogniceable and repeating? I recognice an intro, some chords, an interlude and a part with the lead melody. Maybe you can give the song more structure?

Beginning at 01:06 and 03:00 the hihat is sounding like a metronome. Try working with different velocity-values in the hihat-groove. Or try some open/closed hihat-scheme.

The bridge-noise from 01:51 is to loud and sounds much to 'sharp'. Try some lowpass-filter.

The effects (02:05 and later) are sometimes to loud and maybe you like to do them more 'artificial' using some more reverb, echo and modulation?

As you wrote, the lead melody needs a bit more work. There is no melody that is remarkable. Try to find a more simple melody.

But don't understand me wrong. The music is not bad. I like this tune. It is not exactly my kind of music so don't concern to much.

regards,

Kukulkan

PS. Maybe you want to hear my music? Take a look at http://www.x-beliebig.info/Music/sparetime/

thefool wrote:

Joakim Christiansen wrote:It's good but it's not music I would listen to.

Based on your pic you look like more into "rock"
but thanks!

You're right, mostly heay metal and such

Rock rulzzz! What's your favourite band?

I LOOOVVVVEEEEE METALLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

My Favourites:

Ill Nino
Korn
Pantera
SlipKnot
American Head Charge
Machine Head
Drowning Pool
SpineShank
Mudvayne


RAWRRRRR!

Awesome !!! I like System of a down, Ozzie, LimpBizkit, Survivor, Turisas.

However, besides rock i only listen thefool's music and Kraftwerk. Really. I don't like any other stuff .

Thanks SoulReaper

Kukulkan wrote: The song is missing some structure. Is there a refrain or something recogniceable and repeating? I recognice an intro, some chords, an interlude and a part with the lead melody. Maybe you can give the song more structure?

I agree. The song structure is one of those things one has to learn.

Beginning at 01:06 and 03:00 the hihat is sounding like a metronome. Try working with different velocity-values in the hihat-groove. Or try some open/closed hihat-scheme.

Yeah i will have a look at that.

The bridge-noise from 01:51 is to loud and sounds much to 'sharp'. Try some lowpass-filter.

Yeah i had a problem; the compressor kicks out there. There is an "enourmous" ammout of compression on this whole track and when the bassdrum and the bass itself stops; the strings are winded up. I got to make a lowpass filter kick in before then;

The effects (02:05 and later) are sometimes to loud and maybe you like to do them more 'artificial' using some more reverb, echo and modulation?

Yeah; what you hear at 2:26 is a resonance part of a lowpass cut filter im using.

As you wrote, the lead melody needs a bit more work. There is no melody that is remarkable. Try to find a more simple melody.

Yeah i know; especially second part!

But don't understand me wrong. The music is not bad. I like this tune. It is not exactly my kind of music so don't concern to much.

No you had some nice comments

PS. Maybe you want to hear my music? Take a look at http://www.x-beliebig.info/Music/sparetime/

Nice and relaxed I like number 5 very much.

Yngwie Malmsteen rule's!

Hi,

nice tune - IMHO the instruments are a bit dry (meaning: more effects could be used). Otherwise nice tune! Is it possible to get a grip on the source to make a remix?

Here are some of my tunes:
Weird Man Dancing
Levas Polka (remix)
Space Rider
Push Me

BR,
V2

Rogue wrote:Yngwie Malmsteen rule's!

Nah, he's a poor man's (Joe) Satriani.